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First they said we were an awkward match -we didn’t give a shit The words you spoke should have ended it -but I was too weak And I’m not okay -I promise! Then they said we were a perfect pair -we didn’t disagree But underneath it was a disastrous game -and I just followed blindly But I’m not okay -I promise! Some others saw what we denied -we just kept on going What we did devastated me -I should have listened to them See, I’m not okay -I promise! Now you refuse to see your mistakes -but I don’t care at all The words you spoke were hollow -and I just didn’t know So I’m not okay -I promise! They made me see how fooled I was -for this I’m only grateful A new flame has come and restarted my heart -for you I hope it’s painful If it is, I’m okay -I promise! | ||||||||||||||
 | haleløs | 2012-03-15 09:57:44 |
after 'breaking up is hard to do' ... 'the best revenge is living well' - I promise! sincerely ...
| Nadia K | 2012-03-15 10:19:47 |
Godt digt, på trods af det 'triste' indhold. Rigtig velformuleret, synes det giver en god rytme med "I Promise" - synes desuden det giver et godt twist at du ændrer "I'm not okay" til "I'm okay" til sidst :)
Forresten; Har du ikke fået en novelle med i Dansk Fantasy 2012? TILLYKKE! :)
vh Nadia
Forresten; Har du ikke fået en novelle med i Dansk Fantasy 2012? TILLYKKE! :)
vh Nadia
| Dragonfly | 2012-03-15 17:00:57 |
tak for rosen :) og jo, det har jeg; tak igen ;)
| granatæble | 2012-03-17 16:58:43 |
jeg ved hvad digtet handler om, men alligevel minder det mig om noget helt andet
og det er noget jeg bliver trist af at tænke på.
godt skrevet
og det er noget jeg bliver trist af at tænke på.
godt skrevet
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