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Let us see What will be Sometime in the future It is written in the feature Of a glass ball It is the writing on the wall To be read in your palm It is the calm Before the storm The cold before the warm The dark before the light The fight of the flight Such a sight Only to be seen in the darkest night When souls are ready to devour You whole and take your power Leaving you worthless And when you ask for it back they will lie and say yes and then give a laugh so mirthless And taunt you For your weakness though a few Will see straight through you And know what you can do Even if you know nothing about The strength in you there is no doubt That it is there You just have to bare Your soul Your whole Being to the world And you will be whirled Into things You could not even have dreamed of so spread your wings And learn how to fly You must be quick time is passing by You will fly into the air And you will see them there Way below you Looking up at you in the sky blue And they will know By your beautiful glow That their future is doomed And they will turn to you the flower that just bloomed And beg for a second chance And you will not follow their stance For you will grant their plead And not charge them for their deed You will forgive and forget Every single taunt and threat And with that your future has been written by a man who with his own blood bleed From dead to alive You will thrive Into eternity infinity forever and beyond It has dawned On me that where I have just been That the things I have just seen Will happen soon And the moon Is now back from it's journey behind The clouds and now the crystal is blind As it is no longer a charcoal night For light Has been restored And darling know that your future cannot be ignored | ||||||||||||||
 | haleløs | 2015-04-11 12:08:12 |
would you consider throwing in some spaces, e.g..
"
And learn how to fly
You must be quick time is passing by
S P A C E
You will fly into the air
"
and worry more about intentions & meaningfulness and less about rhyme?
sincerely ...
"
And learn how to fly
You must be quick time is passing by
S P A C E
You will fly into the air
"
and worry more about intentions & meaningfulness and less about rhyme?
sincerely ...
| BigNerdBeard | 2015-04-11 21:26:10 |
The poem is not written to have any meaning. It was written to be confusing and not to make sense that's why it is written like that
| Lau G.N. | 2015-04-12 16:40:03 |
I like your text, it has meaning, to me at least and I like the rhythm...
I like your work with the words and that you stand strong, don't bow to people that tell you how to write, because you have your own beautiful voice.
The NightRaven
I like your work with the words and that you stand strong, don't bow to people that tell you how to write, because you have your own beautiful voice.
The NightRaven
| BigNerdBeard | 2015-04-12 17:46:28 |
Thank you
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